I liked the whole general idea of it. As for the planet's locale, you are probably right but there could be some alien science with those metallic rings. The capital ships were also an excellent touch. They don't come across as repetitious, even though there are several there from the same class.
Very unusual for you, a lot going on, who says space is boring? The sun looks nice, not too crazy on raw fractals as flares myself, but I see it done for plasma-like effects a lot, even in movies (the Core for one, and the Chronicles of Riddick for another) would be cool to bask in the eerie violet light of such a coloured star, the ship's designs are interetsing too
Thanks. It is a different theme than I typically do, some web ad for Eve inspired me to try something new. So I decided to go over the top (obviously a sun that close to a planet would render it uninhabitable).